I will also note - in the first sentence you use weaver and looming in completely separate context - it’s jarring.
Get Kennedy’s book on Deep Point of View — in many locations you have them “looking” or “looked up” etc - this creates narrative distance. If you treat the POV as a “camera” then you only describe what she sees, not that she’s looking at it. The same would apply to any of the senses
example
she heard footsteps approach.
vs
Footsteps approached.
The takeaway is - explain what she experiences but not that she’s experiencing it